A. OUTLINE
Topic
Sentence : The Advantages of Globalization in Indonesian Economics Field. Supporting Sentence 1 : Free of Internasional Markets.
Supporting
Sentence 2 : Ease in Exports and Import Activities.
Supporting
Sentence 3 : Entry of Foreign Companies into a Indonesia.
Concluding Sentence : So, globalization has an important impact in the world economy. Because of that, Indonesia also has a lot of benefits, especially in the economics field . The most prominent is the increasingly free international market, the ease of doing export and import activities and the number of foreign companies that are easy to enter and develop in Indonesia.
B. ESSAY
Globalization is the process of international integration that occurs because of the exchange of world views, products, thoughts, and other aspects. The influence of globalization in this world will continue to grow and create new innovation in various fields, one of them in economics field.
The big impact of globalization in the economics is
the creation of freedom on the international market for buying and selling comes
from several countries. The presence of this international market can be
utilized by companies whose product or service sales have exceeded the needs of
consumers in the domestic area. So, the company can jump into the international
market and find consumers in a wider market.
The flow of globalization automatically makes a country open because companies from overseas can freely enter a country and open up opportunities for products from global markets to enter the domestic market. Example: McDonald's, Starbucks, Nike, and etc. The impact to Indonesia are expanding employment opportunities for the people in our country and providing easy access to foreign investors.
So, globalization has an important impact in the world economy. Because of that, Indonesia also has a lot of benefits, especially in the economics field. The most prominent is the increasingly free international market, the ease of doing export and import activities and the number of foreign companies that are easy to enter and develop in Indonesia.
Over all i like your topic, but i think you can fix it this part "Example: McDonald's, Starbucks, Nike, and etc" with erase the "and"
BalasHapusGood job vera
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HapusHello vera!
BalasHapusYou've comeback with a new article, i realize that there are some improvements already. But i think next time you can choose more proper or suitable words on explaining some situations in the sentence, such as "Jump" into the international market, you can change "jump" with "enter". Goodluck 😉
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HapusHi vera! This topics is very interesting, I like your article. Keep on writing and Good job girl!
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HapusHello, i am so appreciate on your essay but your essay is too specific. Thank you
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
HapusHello Vera! I like your essay, it is very good. But, I think you need to change the topic sentence, it should contains a verb.
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
Hapushey vera! i found some ineffective sentence in your essay. i suggest you ro re-read, revise, and recheck it before you re-comment it. GOODLUCK!
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Hapushi Vera, i’ve read your essay and i found it was a very good essay! the way you choose your sentences makes the readers especially me undestood, and it was very good because you put the time phares according to period of the time. Good job
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
HapusHi vera! I found your essay is very nice. However. I Found some gramatical error there. Maybe you can recheck and refix it! Good luck
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
HapusHi author, thankyou for the article! i found this very helpful and opened my mind. can't wait to read the other impressive article from you :) Keep writing, you have the talent!
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
Hapushi vera, i already read your essay , i think its better if you change the word "jump" to anothers word, gluck
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
HapusI would like to say thank you to all those who have provided input and suggestions for my another article.Your advice means a lot for me. Thank you for the time and hopefully my sharing today can have a positive impact. I will try and learn to be better in the future. Once Again, thank you.
BalasHapusREVISION :
Topic Sentence : The Advantages of Globalization in Indonesian Economics Field.
Supporting Sentence 1 : Free of Internasional Markets.
Supporting Sentence 2 : Ease in Exports and Import Activities.
Supporting Sentence 3 : Entry of Foreign Companies into a Indonesia.
Concluding Sentence : So, globalization has an important impact in the world economy. Because of that, Indonesia also has a lot of benefits, especially in the economics field . The most prominent is the increasingly free international market, the ease of doing export and import activities and the number of foreign companies that are easy to enter and develop in Indonesia.
Globalization is the process of international integration that occurs because of the exchange of world views, products, thoughts, and other aspects. I think influence of globalization in this world will continue to grow and create new innovation in various fields, one of them in economics field.
The big impact of globalization in the economics is the creation of freedom on the international market for buying and selling comes from several countries. The presence of this international market can be utilized by companies whose product or service sales have exceeded the needs of consumers in the domestic area. So, the company can enter into the international market and find consumers in a wider market.
Globalization created an ease in export and import activities. Export activities for Indonesia can increase state revenues, introduce Indonesian products in the global market, and expand production. Import activities are useful to stabilize prices, make it easier to obtain raw materials, and facilitate the fulfillment of the need for goods or services that are not in the country. So, the benefits presented from export and import activities are creating cooperation between countries.
The flow of globalization automatically makes a country open because companies from overseas can freely enter a country and open up opportunities for products from global markets to enter the domestic market. Example: McDonald's, Starbucks, Nike, etc. The impact to Indonesia are expanding employment opportunities for the people in our country and providing easy access to foreign investors.
So, globalization has an important impact in the world economy. Because of that, Indonesia also has a lot of benefits, especially in the economics field. The most prominent is the increasingly free international market, the ease of doing export and import activities and the number of foreign companies that are easy to enter and develop in Indonesia.
Hai Vera. I have read your article. Its very intresting topic. But i think globalization has disadvantages also. Its better to write with balancing information. Good luck.
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
HapusReally good essay, bring a lot of new knowledge, keep it up Vera
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
Hapusyour essay is already good. that is not too general but not to specific, so you can still elaborate the supporting sentences. good job, Vera! :)
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
Hapusits a great essay and information you gives great job
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