Learning is one act that I believe can change my life.
Things change and life is one long, continuous
learning process.
Learning can be done by reading, hearing, and
watching or seeing.
Learning by reading, its means we can learn
something new from reading books, articles, magazines, and newspapers.
The more books that I read, the more I can get
explanations for the things that I don't know.
Besides that, by reading books I can widen the array
of my vocabulary words that I can use in my work and my daily life .
This, of course, can help me express my opinion in a
simpler, easier to understand language and it can also increase my confidence
when I talk with other people.
Not just by reading, I can usually learn new things
by hearing.
Hearing itself means I can get information from
sharing and exchanging opinions or arguments with other people.
From this, I can see how others perceive the world
around us.
The more I hear and listen carefully about others’
opinion , I can get a lot of things.
The first one is to make me more clever and wiser
than before.
This gives me more knowledge and a wider insight
about different matters.
Besides that, from hearing I feel that I can more
easily solve my problems by trying to better understand others’ situations.
The second one is to make it easier for me to take my decisions.
By listening to other people's opinions or input, It
will be easier to make decisions because based on the information I get from
others and I can try to compare it with my own opinion and experience.
Above that, in this era of globalization, I can
learn via digital media, for example I can learn by watching.
It makes my learning process more effective and
efficient.
I can get more and more new knowledge by watching television
or other internet media, such as Youtube.
With the global digitalization process, I can learn
anywhere, anytime.
I just need to bring my phone, access the Internet
and see all the information that I would need.
All the things that I want to know, all the
information I might need can be accessed easily by utilizing the facilities
that I have in my possession.
By learning, I can increase the motivation in myself
to be able to become someone successful in the future.
With Learning also, I can have lots of
knowledge
I hope, I can
be the person that others need and I hope to be able to help others.
By learning, I feel the skills that exist in me also
develop.
Because of that, I make learning one of my most
important hobbies.
I found your paragraph's topic is very interesting. However. Your conclusion did not relate to the introduction and the supporting points. I also find that your introduction is quite short and doesn't have any correlation with another sentence. You can improve your paragraph later. Keep spirit :)
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
HapusYour article topic is quite good and i really like your topic. But i think you can make your article become 1 paragraph so can more orderly. But overall its good keep good work Vera!!!
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
HapusHaii, it's a good article. But, it would be better, you can fix it by do not giving space between one sub topic (supporting sentence) with other sub topics and make it into one line. Good job girl!
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
HapusWhat a good topic girl! !!it more better if you can make it clear your supporting idea, and make it related with your topic sentences and conclussion. Becauss there are some topic not related. Good joob girl! !! Keep fighting!!!
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
Hapusaku sih yes
BalasHapusim so happy,thank you :)
HapusYou blog is very motivate but maybe for the next you should make it into pharagraph and giving more space between them, nicee Blog by the way
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
HapusWhat a great paragraph! I suggest to make some correction on minor supporting sentence ^^
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
Hapuswow its a good story, good job!!!
BalasHapusim so happy,thank you :)
HapusWaww! what a great topic you've chosen! it was very interesting story but i suggest you to make it one line with the subtopic to be a paragraph and make conclusion longer. But, overall i enjoyed your story <3
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
HapusIt's nice to read it, iam very appreciate your essay. But for more better you must to repair your sentences, because you're essay is not clearly stated. The last your conclusion is less than a must. Thank you, have a nice day
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
HapusThis is a great article. The topic you choose is really a fresh idea, different from the others. But, in my opinion, you should give attention to the arrangement of sentences to make it more clear between the major and minor sentences. Besides that, I think it would be better if the sentences "With Learning also, I can have lots of knowledge. I hope, I can be the person that others need and I hope to be able to help others" can be changed to "From learning, I get more knowledge to share with others and able to help the other people".
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
HapusI would like to say thank you to all those who have provided input and suggestions for my first article.Your advice means a lot for me. Thank you for the time and hopefully my sharing today can have a positive impact. I will try and learn to be better in the future. Once Again, thank you.
BalasHapusREVISION :
Learning is one act and hobbies that I believe can change my life. Learning is the process of acquiring new, or modifying existing, knowledge, behaviors, skills, values, or preferences. I have quotes that i very like , “there are no secrets to success. It is result of preparation, hard work and learning”. This statement really motivated me and make me feel that learning is must and important to us. Learning can be done by reading, hearing, and watching or seeing.
Learning by reading, its means we can learn something new from reading books, articles, magazines, and newspapers. The more books that I read, the more I can get explanations for the things that I don't know. Besides that, by reading books I can widen the array of my vocabulary, words that I can use in my work and my daily life . This, of course, can help me express my opinion in a simpler, easier to understand language and it can also increase my confidence when I talk with other people.
Not just by reading, I can usually learn new things by hearing. Hearing itself means I can get information from sharing and exchanging opinions or arguments with other people. From this, I can see how others perceive the world around us. The more I hear and listen carefully about others’ opinion , I can get a lot of things. The first one is to make me more clever and wiser than before. This gives me more knowledge and a wider insight about different matters.Besides that, from hearing I feel that I can more easily solve my problems by trying to better understand others’ situations. The second one is to make it easier for me to take my decisions. By listening to other people's opinions or input, It will be easier to make decisions because based on the information I get from others and I can try to compare it with my own opinion and experience.
Above that, in this era of globalization, I can learn via digital media, for example I can learn by watching. It makes my learning process more effective and efficient. I can get more and more new knowledge by watching television or other internet media, such as Youtube. With the global digitalization process, I can learn anywhere, anytime. I just need to bring my phone, access the Internet and see all the information that I would need. All the things that I want to know, all the information I might need can be accessed easily by utilizing the facilities that I have in my possession.
By learning, I can increase the motivation in myself to be able to become someone successful in the future. From learning, I get more knowledge to share with others. I hope, I can be the person that have better understand others’ situations. By learning, I feel the skills that exist in me also develop. Because of that, I make learning one of my most important hobbies.
what a good story to read! you creatively deliver it into sentences. but, it would be better if you make the conclusion sentence clearer and make the format of the paragraph to the general format. keep up the good work, Vera!
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
HapusWhat a fresh and unique article, but maybe you only need to give more attention to the paragraph so the readers can read it more easily. But for all it is good already 😊
BalasHapusthank you for the input and suggestions, I will try to fix it so that it will be better in the future. Your advice means a lot for me
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